Matt Bellamy

Hey! This could be a great poem but it needs a bit of tweaking. I think the main problem is that some of it is worded awkwardly. It seems like ...

This is a sweet poem, very cute. However, you need to work on your grammar. Capitalise your I's, and there are places where you said then instead of than, quiet ...

Hey! I really like this, and mainly because I didn't expect the twist that you had killed your mother. I like the rhyming because it makes the poem sound cheerful, ...

Hi! I really like this. I love how you changed the mood towards the end, and I liked your rhyming. The rhyming could be better though, there are some places ...

Hi! I thought this was a nice idea - something of beauty distracts you from feeling bad about whatever, and you describe it. I like it. However, you change from ...

Hey! I thought this was really well written, but I didn't get the title either, and I wasn't really sure what you were talking about. But that doesn't seem to ...

Hey! I really like this poem. It sounds very young and cute! I think that's because of the rhyming - like Boo said, we could tell what you were going ...

Hi! I like the simplicity of this poem. At first I thought it could do with some description but I think that the lack of description makes it easier to ...

Hi! First of all I must say, I absolutely love this line: "We’re drunk on ink instead of beer". Awesome! I can kind of tell that you didn't know when ...

Hello! I like how you used description and emotion in this poem, it worked really well.I just have a couple of nitpicks though. You use commas all the way through ...

Hi! When I saw the title, I thought that death/sadness would be described like a spider's web and I think it would be great if you could do that. I ...

I thought this was good. It's emotional without being too dramatic, and the ending is bittersweet. I think you could improve it perhaps by adding in something that is a ...

I was going to comment on the fact that highway and the other words were so far away and that they'd look better if they were a bit closer, but ...

I haven't read the previous comments because I'm doing this on my phone, so sorry if I repeat anyone. I like how you used personification in this piece, making the ...

This poem is really cute! It feels quite light-hearted because of the rhyming - the words you use to rhyme are a bit simple and obvious, but if it was ...